Saturday, January 16, 2010

Where Are The Grammar Police?

 
BOE Unanimously Adopted A Flawed "Vision Statement"

"In the Greece Central School District, faculty, staff, and the community collaborate to provide a comprehensive, successful experience for each and every student we serve and where diversity and the dignity of each individual is honored in an environment that is safe and secure."

SCATS ~~ The second portion (after the third "and") is not an independent clause (that means it can't stand by itself). It also isn't the object of the prepositional phrase: "In the Greece Central School District." In a best case scenario, it is a grammatically incorrect run-on sentence that serves as a poor model for students.

Perhaps they meant to say something like:
The Greece Central School District is where faculty, staff, and the community collaborate to provide a comprehensive, successful experience for each and every student we serve and (it is) where diversity and the dignity of each individual is honored in an environment that is safe and secure.

WHERE ARE OUR HIGHLY
PAID ENGLISH TEACHERS?

I SUGGEST THAT THE SUPT
& BOE CONSULT WITH ONE!

 

19 comments:

Anonymous said...

Allow me to investigate the facts, here.

SCATS points out a potential grammatical error in a school vision statement while he himself ran a headline titled, "Waiting for the other foot to fall" on a topic that had nothing to do with Peroneal Neuropathy.

A mixed metaphor or ignorant e-journalist? You be the judge.

Even so...
"Pot", meet "kettle". That is what I will file in my official report, but don't worry. There's not a "shred" of evidence either way.

Sincerely,
Maybe a Greece Police Officer

Anonymous said...

It does not matter because the statement means nothing. It is for show and show only.
It is written this way Scats because in the end they will do at the time whatever they want and be able to say what it meant.
Again, it is for nothing but show. Perhaps the worst part is it is THIS type of thing the board spends their time on.
Lets not forget the policy which was SUPPOSED to cover the hockey coach conduct, IT meant nothing because at the time it did not say what they wanted it to say.

Anonymous said...

Holy Strunk and White Batman

Anonymous said...

This is why Greece is a laughingstock. We can't even pretend to be a school district.

Anonymous said...

SCATS - Are you suggesting that the highly paid superintendent who hired a consultant (wasn't it someone from RIT?) to meet with do-gooder type community people (like Gary Elling) to come up with a new vision statement FAILED in their 'mission'?

I want my money back!!!!!!

(Welcome To the Greece Central School District Where Student Learning Are the Goal!)

Anonymous said...

Redrafting a mission statement looks like another place to spend money without having any discernible impact on test scores, graduation rates or any other measure of educational success.

Anonymous said...

As a teacher, I agree that finding a mission statement was a waste of time and money. I go back to the old saying of "Put your money where your mouth is"; that money could have gone to extra resources for students who need it. I am also a bit perturbed about another waste of GCSD money: all the extra administration at the professional developments that teachers attend. You have six or more people there when it takes only one or two to teach the class. We need to go back to basics...what about hiring someone to cut all the waste in our district? That might be worth the money if the right person is hired. I know you are always balking at teacher salaries and benefits, but trust me, there are a ton of other things out there to cut!!

SCATS said...

To 9:14AM ~~ I agree. There is much to be saved in transportation, stipends, sports programs, consultants, "geese wranglers", and a plethora of other areas. However, that doesn't change the fact that salaries & benefits still comprise 80+% of the overall budget.

Anonymous said...

Where is the outrage, the embarassment by Greece residents? Do any of you think this poorly constructed statement would fly in Penfield? Pittsford? Brighton? I guess we've beocome so accustomed to poor service, pathetic outcomes and wasted $ that we're willing to accept the unacceptable. We do it willingly and we even do it with a smile!

Anonymous said...

Let's ask someone to diagram that sentence. The previous mission statement "greece where student learning is the goal" wasn't a sentence either. So we settled then and we are settling now.

Anonymous said...

I always wondered why Greece needed to spell out "student learning is the goal." What else on earth would it be?

Anonymous said...

To 9:14~ the teacher,

Why so many people modeling what you need to learn....I suspect they try to cram as much learning as possible into short time buckets because you insist on being paid to read and learn! Why would we expect teachers to WANT to learn?

Anonymous said...

You're wrong 1:35. The district motto is or was "Student learning is the goal." That is a complete sentence. Mindless but complete.

Anonymous said...

Knowing that one can debate the value of a mission statement, let's go with the assumption that there is some value to having one.

I believe that a mission statement is something that a new administration would use to concisely spell out the principles that will guide their decisions. In this context it is a useful tool.

Greece CSD instead is coming up with one at the end of an administrations term. In this case it looks like a school board grasping to give meaning to rudderless leadership.

Anonymous said...

New Mission Statement: Get the kids to the next grade by hook or by crook!

And in our free time, hire consultants!

Anonymous said...

9:27 You are right.

Yes it is like the people that live in a shabby house and fix it up right before they are going to sell it to attract buyers. If they had done the remodel/renovation before they could have lived in a neat stylish house but chose to wait until a crisis moment to make changes.
Obviously the board members think this "pithy" mission statement will look good in the ads to find us a new superintendent.
Forget it. With our lowered expectations for our students and administration we will only attract sub par candidates.

SCATS said...

To 9:46AM ~~ Using your analogy to fixing up a home before selling it, then wouldn't it help if Steve cleaned house (administratively)before he left? He has nothing to lose and GCSD has everything to gain.

Anonymous said...

I for one would love to see SA clean house before he leaves. How do we go about getting that message to him?

SCATS said...

To 10:18PM ~~ A phone call? A letter? Resident's Forum? Pick your poison ;)